Alone Under Streetlamps

30 Jul

A path through an empty park

At the end of day,

A lone walker in the dark

As streetlamps fend the night away.

 

The night air feels cold,

The wind’s caress is frigid

Life is fast, my soul feels old.

Streetlamps; silent, rigid.

 

People pass in yellow

light, wordless as required,

out in the night, exhausts bellow,

as I wander, weary but untired.

 

Lonesome and yearning, my hand

Grips my cellphone tight,

my friends are far away, and

yet they’re here: in my sight.

 

Phone: vibrate. Please, connect,

and bring companions to me here,

give life to my dreams, resurrect

those memories that sear

 

with happiness that’s heart-wrenching,

my hold on you won’t slip,

phone; please become a hand

And return my own hand’s grip.

 

 

This is a poem I wrote some time ago, on the theme of loneliness. Yes, I know loneliness as a concept is a bit overdone and cliched in poetry – we poor misunderstood poets like to indulge ourselves in somewhat vain laments at our aloneness in the world –  but at the time of writing this poem loneliness was the overpowering feeling in my life, living as a lodger in an unfriendly home in a dull small town where I had recently moved for work. I spent a lot of evenings wandering the quiet streets, smoking cigarettes, going to the newsagents, or going to buy beer; any excuse really to get out of the cabin-sized bedroom I was renting.

(it took me a while to try and get the metre and rhymes right for this. I normally don’t bother with them much. Anyone who reads this and has constructive criticism to give, please comment 🙂  )

 

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2 Responses to “Alone Under Streetlamps”

  1. changered July 30, 2009 at 9:21 pm #

    I really, really like this. I don’t like criticising since I believe everyone has a unique way.
    This was beautifully rhymed-timed. Mmm.
    I can feel the loneliness creeping over me and I can see the streets from your eyes. Well done! (:

    ~ChangeRed.

    http://ishallchangered.wordpress.com/

    • ocksblog August 11, 2009 at 7:30 pm #

      belated thanks for the comment. I am so glad the poem made an impression on you 🙂
      I’m glad the loneliness comes across in it, as it really is one of those poems that is meant to conjure a moment and a feeling.

      I will keep an eye on your blog too – some interesting stuff on there

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