Poem about techno

21 Sep

UPDATE (May 2012): I wrote this a while ago, and it’s not very good. I’m rewriting it/writing a new one currently, as it attracts quite a few hits, so there will be a much improved version on here soon.

Those clattering,
rattling machinery snares
like robotic calypso
for the digital age

and the swallowing
wallowing wwump-wwump-wwump
wumps of tireless compassionless
military kickdrums

that move piston limbs
shake warehouse walls
lift souls in rhythm
and strike terror into the grey-headed.

Tribal drum music composed thus:
from ingredients, briefly
technology. And funk.
And liberal doses of ecstasy and punk

Manufactured in smoggy air
in closed down London town
or on the crumbling concrete streets
of Berlin and Detroit.

Techno emanates and resonates
multiplying and stultifying
with the never-ending soul-rending
tuneless rhythm of life.

Another first draft, just knocked this up just now, using themes from a previous poem I wrote a while back. As it’s about music, and that music is rhythm-driven techno, I want to try and convey a strong sense of rhythm (although not necessarily regular rhythm) in the poem. Don’t think I have achieved this yet. Also I want it to roll on steadily like techno music, so the stanzas have to progress smoothly and rhythmically too.

Criticism, suggestions, praise, and even just recognition that you have read the piece is appreciated 🙂

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7 Responses to “Poem about techno”

  1. Serena September 21, 2009 at 10:14 pm #

    I have read the piece :]

    • ocksblog September 22, 2009 at 8:47 am #

      noted.

      😉

  2. redhead February 15, 2011 at 4:33 pm #

    i cant find the deep meaning of it aside from the soul searching of the techno. 🙂
    its all about describing dont get me wrong 🙂

  3. eric March 30, 2011 at 4:30 pm #

    hi im in grade ten and we are doing poem analysing and we had to pic a poeme we liked so i picked yours but i cant do it until i have the name of the auther so please reply soon i realy like this poeme 🙂

    • ocksblog March 31, 2011 at 1:05 pm #

      Hello Eric,
      Thanks very much for your comment – I am glad you liked the poem!
      I have sent you an email with my name to your hotmail address, so have a look there.

      Cheers

  4. eric April 4, 2011 at 4:18 pm #

    i couldnt find your message 😦

  5. joleneberube September 24, 2013 at 5:50 am #

    jolene berube http://joleneberube.wordpress.com

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