Oneness Poem

19 Dec

The trees:

are beautiful,

green above the sheen of a clear stream

they’re swaying,

soaring zephyr-stirred

on a background of azure purity.

The unmovable: it’s evident,

in the smooth movement of the stream;

rolling, splish splash

in grass banks.

Up above: a glide of vapour;

white cloud benignly

shifts as sun

(God’s sun)

beams down,

his light bathing bathers.

Droplets depart mother river

splashed upwards they

glint before glistening

on skin.

They rinse clean skins of bodies,

that, once apart,

melt one-wards and meld

becoming boundless,

as boundaries disappear

so that together, here,

all are One.

And in this nature

this wildness of blue, brown, green

in the life-filled

brilliance of sparkling water’s sheen

all is one,


The Unmovable

in motion –

One in the Oneness;


This is a rewriting of a poem I wrote a few years ago after a spiritual experience I had after a rave in the Welsh mountains. The rave was a pretty dodgy techno party, frequented by the usual deadbeats and misfits of society that these events attract. Fun nevertheless, and located in a beautiful spot called Forest Coalpit in the Brecon Beacons. We stayed at the party until about 9am, by which time the sun was really scorching, and then drove a mile further up the track to a spot by a beautiful stream where we got out and had a dip. While there I had a very powerful sense of spiritual elation, brought on in part by a book I had been reading about religion and spiritualism (The Perennial Philosophy by Aldous Huxley – amazing book). The references to the ‘unmovable’, and ‘one in the oneness’ and ‘nirvana’ come from the theological writings I discovered through this book. Looking back, to suggest I attained nirvana is a bit pretentious – if I came anywhere near it it didn’t last, although I still remember the feeling I had.

This is the second rewriting of this poem, the first is on this blog and entitled ‘After the Party’, and is less high-flown.

5 Responses to “Oneness Poem”

  1. Bluesander at 9:56 pm #

    I was blown away by the imagery.
    I really like your writing style. I don’t know why, but I always love writing styles that are so different from mine. I’m definitely going to follow for more. 🙂

    • ocksblog at 10:43 pm #

      great, I am glad you like it! It was brought about by strong feelings, but the challenge is always to make the reader feel those feelings too

      I will have a look at your site tomorrow (must go to bed now – wordpress is stealing my sleep!)

  2. thePaperTiger at 6:45 am #

    There’s vitality in this pome. It feels alive, which of course, it is; this pome being proof of the symbiosis between the people and the surroundings they frolic in. There’s a reason they get on so well – they were once, are and always will be one.

    • ocksblog at 6:06 pm #

      hey Emeka,
      cheers mate. Maybe I’ll actually learn it so I can perform it sometime!

      Look out for another one sometime soon

  3. Ro at 3:00 am #

    This was pretty good! The spirit of it was fantastic, and the vibrant imagery was awesome. The only complaint I might have was it was slightly vague.
    Ro 🙂

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